Teenagers have no respect for anyone! They are instigators! So loud!
Are teenagers lazy monsters? Or do we just enjoy a lie in each morning? Adults call us lazy because according to society, we don’t help our parents with work and we make noise on the bus.
When teenagers grow they go through something called puberty, where we need more rest, grow hair in certain places and go into different mood swings for no particular reason. Teenagers need more sleep but never actually rest (because of parties,video games or even just revision). When it’s time for them to wake up, they are moody because they have not had enough rest. This explains why teenagers go into mood swings for no particular reason.
Monsters are large, ugly and frightening creatures. A teenager is a boy or girl in the age group of thirteen to nineteen. What I am trying to say is that monsters are nothing like us. Therefore I am very confused as to why we would be called lazy monsters when we are actually hard-working people. Adults always blame younglings for committing crimes when a quarter of the time it isn’t even us. If we’re so lazy how do we have time to be going out and committing crimes? Some teenagers are lazy because their parents are.
MONKEY SEE MONKEY DO
When a child sees their parents do something, they are going to copy. This is much like teenagers when they see their parents eat fast food and lay in all day, it makes children think that they don’t have to work hard and can be lazy all the time. Another reason why we are always waking up very late because we release a hormone called melatonin at about one in the morning instead of around ten o’clock like adults. This hormone helps you to go to sleep. One way to help teens get more sleep is, making them go to sleep earlier than usual so they wake up on time for school and are not late.
LAZY?
This means unwilling to work or use energy. On a school day, an average teenager wakes up between the hours of six o’clock and eight o’clock. An average secondary school starts between the hours of 8:30 am and 9:00 am and finishes between the hours of 3:00 pm and 5:00 pm. Teenagers sit down at a desk for six whole hours and listen to a teacher telling them how to answer a question or a method on how to answer a question. As students of a school, we have to listen to the teacher in order to answer the questions given to us. As a school it is compulsory for us to do physical education, this means we have to participate in physical activity. This is a mixture of sports such as football, basketball, volleyball, dodge ball and so on. This point proves that we are not lazy monsters.
ARE ADULTS ACTUALLY MORE LAZY?
An average adult wakes up between the hours of 7:00 am and 8:00 am. An average work day for adults starts between the hours of 6:00 am and 9:00 am and can last a whole day and in some cases, the night. Now I respect those people that work hard such as builders, teachers, doctors and other exhausting roles, but surely those who sit down at a desk all day must be classified as lazy? Although they are making a difference in the world, they are doing their job like sloth’s. Could even people like the QUEEN be classified as lazy?Even though she rules over quite a lot of countries, to be honest all she does is sign papers, makes decisions and turns up to meetings to discuss things going on in the world. As you can see, what I am trying to tell you is, teenagers don’t deserve to be called lazy if we do more work than most adults. The phrase “Go and tidy your room” is very popular. When adults tell children to go and tidy your room, it’s good but half of the time their rooms aren’t even tidy. Lazy huh?
Through this essay, I am trying to tell you that teenagers are not always lazy, but very hard-working young adults. I have to admit, sometimes we are lazy or pain in the necks but we are lovely creatures and you should be grateful to have us in this amazing world. Life would be boring without us.
April 20, 2015 at 11:01 pm
Joshua,
You’re really working towards both your Perfect Paragraph and Expository Writing badge. Nearly, but not there yet.
Targets
1) You are about 100 words away from your minimum word limit
2) Where might you be more concise? Where have you repeated yourself? Look at your first paragraph, for instance.
3) Avoid starting a sentence with a conjunction (and, but, also, because)
4) Aim to re-draft at least one paragraph in order to achieve the Perfect Paragraph badge
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-one-writing/perfect-paragraph/
How will you meet this criteria?
Look at your third paragraph – this has a few spelling mistakes and could do with a quick edit of sentence structures.
April 27, 2015 at 6:14 pm
Thanks for the advice Mr.North, thanks to you I now have the perfect paragraph badge and am now aiming towards the explositry badge
April 27, 2015 at 8:23 pm
I HAVE FINISHED MY ESSAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
April 29, 2015 at 11:47 pm
You’re nearly there, but you still haven’t quite got the Expository badge. I can see you are pleased about achieving Perfect Paragraph – you worked hard.
Targets
Read your first paragraph – how might you avoid the repetition of your point about enjoying a lie in?
Read your second paragraph – how might you avoid repeating the word because?
What other edits will you need to make to your expression? Why?
May 10, 2015 at 11:03 pm
Hello Josh,
You’re nearly there – I have a few more targets for you:
1) Look at how often you have used the word ‘sleep’ – vary your vocabulary to avoid repetition – this might also be an indication of how you might need to be more concise with your expression.
2) How might your introduction be made more engaging?
3) How might your ending be made less mechanical – what will you want your readers to remember most about your essay?
May 19, 2015 at 7:18 pm
I will try and do that
June 3, 2015 at 7:59 am
Hello Josh,
There are still a few typos to correct here.
You have used the word ‘because’ four times very close together; Look at paragraph three – you have used the word ‘teenager’ seven times here – vary your vocabulary for effect.
Expository badge not achieved – yet.
June 13, 2015 at 3:28 pm
Hello Josh,
Please learn the difference between we’re and were.
Have a look at where you have posed rhetorical questions – have you used question marks?
June 17, 2015 at 6:25 pm
Hello sir,
I don’t really see where I have made the mistake of we’re and were. Could you please go through it with me?
June 24, 2015 at 6:54 pm
Hello sir,
I have gone through my work and corrected the mistake. I have also updated my blog and I believe it is much stronger now. Please let me know if I have achieved the Explositry badge.(hopefully)